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before a family
materializes
we sit on our brushes
of air
and dream of painting life
into existence.

birds, perched
on the other side of the wall
mock us with their
zest for living
before dawn.

improbably, the loudest calls
now emerge from inside,
fluttering past the door into the trees.
my first attempt at writing post-wrimo, and in the midst of this new clarity I have found.
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kallia-goldenwings Featured By Owner May 11, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
oh my that is just so true.
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Fledgist Featured By Owner May 9, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I like the images, but the concluding conceit doesn't come across all that clearly. Are you saying that the people indoors are really caged birds?
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