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The day presses against my stomach, as if
it could demand to be fed and not the other way around.
I reach out a hand and clasp the equator
while you straddle the poles, a starving child waiting for summer.
Don't you know, the seasons have closed their doors, so that yesterday
closed people walked all around me and somehow I was the only one open--
flotsam, jetsam in my hair
everything smelling of wreckage and jasmine.

The dawn of questioning:
Why don't they want girls to turn out like men, anyway?
Why does a poem change when it
touches the air?
When no one answers
it goes back to being evening.

Today is a dragon I was born to fight, I think.
I am so certain that I have dreamed it
though my dreams are plowing through, swallowing my hair
like the throat and hands I've never possessed.

One thing’s for certain: no one knows how deep their breath is
until they write poetry.

Then our mouths slowly get tired and move away
our bodies still solid, like
heavy gray elephants carrying girls around. I watch them plod on,
my heart feeling like it’s been through a washer
and a dryer. It doesn’t come cheap,
doing it in a public facility, you know?

Sooner or later I will
have to start over with something so intangible
it cannot even be called junk
and unjunk is probably
the junkiest thing in the world to junk with.
©2008 ~mySeity
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something that came out of a very, Very long exercise we're doing in English, involving many steps and writing 10 pages of "mindspills."

well, this is what came out, edited over more times than usual. I think the result is more...sophisticated? than usual, but also more...worked-over, if you get what I mean.

:heart:thanks for commenting.
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~tappergurl:icontappergurl: Mar 25, 2008, 8:04:19 PM
:+fav: A lot of work went into this and it's very very enjoyable. Thought-provoking.

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Love,

Katie
*Fledgist:iconFledgist: Mar 27, 2008, 11:30:57 AM
Shouldn't that be 'the seasons have closed their doors'?

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As we grow older, we do not get any younger.
~Tempest84:iconTempest84: May 17, 2008, 10:55:06 PM
It's been a long time since I've commented on your poetry, unfortunately, but I couldn't not tell you this. I think the beauty of your poetry is that even though sometimes I'm completely lost unless I concentrate hard, it's still so enjoyable for the imagery, it's surreal and completely real and beautiful, I love it. Don't ever stop writing, please.

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~mySeity:iconmySeity: May 24, 2008, 9:34:58 PM
:heart: thank you for that. I just wrote a poem for the first time in almost two months, and have been feeling uncertain, but comments like yours help more than you know :heart:

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To live is so startling it leaves little time for anything else. -Emily Dickinson